Please critique this G+ post

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I have a client who pays me (among other things) to post articles to his company's Google+ page. Depending on my mood, I try to inject humor into the articles, mainly to amuse myself.

Sometimes I get in a really weird mood, and I wonder if I may be going a bit far with the humor.

Also, I'm a Northerner born in Brooklyn, and the client is in Georgia; so I try to write the posts with a Georgia accent, as it were. I sometimes wonder if I'm pouring it on a bit thick not only with the dialect, but with the humor. I've found that what's considered funny in New York might not go over as well in some other places.

So I'd appreciate any input regarding this post, good or bad -- especially from Southerners.

https://plus.google.com/u/0/109014904495069075801/posts/KnHytiVm71j

Thanks,

-Rich
 
I get the reason for the dentist analogy but I think it needs to be just a bit shorter. Otherwise. Good stuff and good comparison.
 
Thanks, Adam.

What's funny is that the impetus for the post actually was that I was looking for a dentist who accepts the AARP dental insurance, and my friend Bill actually did jokingly tell me that he had some Bondo in the garage if I wanted to try that first.

I think the post is a little long, too. Once I get to writing, I sometimes get carried away...

Thanks again,

-Rich
 
RJM62 said:
I think the post is a little long, too. Once I get to writing, I sometimes get carried away...
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Or as they say on the inernets, TL;DR.

Rich, you know I was born in Noo Joisey, but I've lived here since '86. It read like you're trying too hard. Maybe brush up on some Lewis Grizzard. :)
 
rpadula said:
Or as they say on the inernets, TL;DR.
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Yes, the world has gone instant-gratification. TL;DR ("too long; didn't read) is a seriously rude sentiment that litters the site that started it, Reddit... Which is the ultimate irony since READ is in their name. (As I roll my eyes at that...)

The site is mostly full of boring short comments with little more than witty comments and zingers anymore, in order to attract a bigger crowd. Pretty dull, really... Which of course, makes it wildly popular. The stupid stuff gets moderated up. Same problem at Digg.com. And both are overrun with bored Liberals (sorry, it's just true) who'll run off anyone with more than a one-line answer for anything. Yawn.

If one can't read a page of text on the Internet on something you clicked on, being that Internet discussion forums are a text-based media... perhaps one should just get a phone and text message everyone -- or join Twitter. ;) We used to have these things called discussions on USENET, and it probably helped that we all had keyboards and knew how to touch-type. :)

Anyway, back to Rich's thing... If its an advertisement, the modern world won't read all of it. It's funny and fun, but the text-message world doesn't know how to scroll down, nor is their attention span big enough for a full page of text. It needs to get its point across in a text box no bigger than an inch or two of screen real-estate. Especially for the mobile device crowd.

Reading and writing are not what people do anymore. :(
 
Too many "I reckon" - that is something which might be used in conversational speech, less so in writing, and in any event, it is not really a southern expression. Maybe "I figure" would be a better choice.

Other than that, I have no complaint.
 
Very helpful comments, everyone. Thank you.

I think reading some Lewis Grizzard would be a good thing in any case. I read some of his work in college, and I always liked his standup. I was very sad when he died.

-Rich
 
denverpilot said:
Yes, the world has gone instant-gratification. TL;DR ("too long; didn't read) is a seriously rude sentiment that litters the site that started it, Reddit... Which is the ultimate irony since READ is in their name. (As I roll my eyes at that...)
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Really? I remember seeing TLDR around the internet many years before reddit...Reddit came about in 2005. I know it was in use on Slashdot long before that.
 
Perhaps. It didn't usually get modded up to the top there, though. (I haven't read Slashdot with a moderation level set below mid-Range for a very long time... I can't remember ever seeing a TLDR post moderated up to where I could actually see it.) ;)

Heck, I haven't been TO Slashdot to look for stuff in a decade, but I have the daily headlines e-mailed to me. Heh. I just click on the one interesting article per day anymore...

So I'm just as bad as the TL;DR crowd but I pre-filter, I guess. ;)
 
RJM62 said:
Very helpful comments, everyone. Thank you.

I think reading some Lewis Grizzard would be a good thing in any case. I read some of his work in college, and I always liked his standup. I was very sad when he died.

-Rich
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Well, Lewis had won over my NJ Italian grandmother when she moved in with us in Georgia. He had a column in the AJC at the time, IIRC. It's funny; I hadn't thought of him in years. I don't know why your post conjured his name, instead of that other, currently famous redneck from Georgia. :dunno:
 
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