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AuntPeggy

AuntPeggy

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March
snow melts in the rain
crocus blooms in the grass
it's Daylight Savings Time
 
AuntPeggy said:
March
snow melts in the rain
crocus blooms in the grass
it's Daylight Savings Time
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Hey, I think I see some 5-7-5 infractions there :)

Where is my checklist?
I think I forgot something
Flaps still up on final

EDIT: Argghh!!! 6 syllables in the last line! Drat.
 
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So far, Nick's the only one who's gotten the 5-7-5 right.

Flying along
Slipped the surly bonds of Earth
I shall not return
 
Ted DuPuis said:
So far, Nick's the only one who's gotten the 5-7-5 right.

Flying along
Slipped the surly bonds of Earth
I shall not return
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Oooh....fail.

Ted pronounces words
Like along with too many
Syllables in it.

:D
 
lots of dumb in here
seventy five percent fail
now it is sixty
 
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AuntPeggy said:
March
snow melts in the rain
crocus blooms in the grass
it's Daylight Savings Time
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OK, how about this?

March
snow melts in the rain
crocus flowers in the grass
Daylight Savings Time
 
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Dang, Nick was right. Hmm....

Flying through the sky
Slipped the surly bonds of Earth
I shall not return

Better? :)
 
March
Thundersnow last night
Got to go out and shovel
A path to the road
 
wbarnhill said:
What the heck is this?
I can't figure out this crap
How do I do it?
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http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Haiku-Poem

It is wrong to count syllables in English.
Our first failure - when we tried to mimic our own Classic (romance language) poetry - should have taught us better centuries ago. English syllables are hopelessly irregular and, on average, half-again longer than the Japanese syllabet.

If we would strive for some uniformity in our haiku, we must utilize something that we do have: a good beat. Japanese beat is so weak that some say the syllabets are always equally stressed and / or identical in length. Our beat, if we would teach it (or, them), can even be recognized by children.

I noticed, independently of Blyth - that Japanese haiku, even when the syllabet count exceeds the ideal - usually have 7-8 beats; and, so, I think, should ours."
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Okay, I'm going try again:

Counting syllables
Not as easy as I thought
I would rather fly
 
Decathlon waiting
Loops and spins and rolls, yee haw
Acro is for me

:D
 
Shouldn't the third line should have just been "refrigerator"? :)
 
I think the process
Of writing haiku very
tedious for sure
 
Beautiful day out
Hey look I have an airplane!
Let's go fly somewhere
 
wbarnhill said:
I hate you with the
fire of a thousand suns
I wish I could fly...

:(
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Come to Williamsport
You are welcome at my house
We will go flying

or...

Meet me at Rock Hill
I fly dogs from there often
You can come along

:)
 
Red sand between my toes
From a vacation in outer space
(That was a martian Haiku)
 
People always ask me
DMC what does it mean?
D's for never dirty,
MC for Mostly Clean.


Wait, that's rap, not Haiku.
 
warming earth grows grass
round the field the farmer goes
fresh hay for the horse
 
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